Thread:Mechemik/@comment-44925288-20200205110219/@comment-44925288-20200206170758

It is still flawed.

The way you have written it still implies previous knowledge of an established connection between draconids and ornithosaurs that doesn't exist in the article.

If you want to simply chop words for the sake of it, a better change would be:

"A major difference between ornithosaurs and draconids is that whereas the former are beasts ruled by instincts, the latter may possess intelligence enough to converse."

That said, even then the order of draconids and ornithosaurs should be reveresed as the sentence structure is implying that ornithosaurs is the topic of the sentence rather than draconids.

That's why in my edit I first established the major similarities between the two and then noted a major difference. The point of my edit was to fix the grammar and also include additional information relavent to the article (establishing the similarities between the two creatures).

How it's currently written would be similar to the following:

"Dog is a hypernym used to refer to a number of medium sized mammals, usually possessing four limbs and a tail. However, a major difference between jellyfish and dogs is that whereas the former are creatures that float in the water, the latter live on land."

The sudden comparison between the two makes no sense without first establishing a connection and even then the position of dogs in the second sentence should be first to indicate that it's still the topic of the sentence and that it hasn't been changed to jellyfish.